Saturday, 16 June 2012

all your diction dripping with disdain

hi.

Since this weekend I did the 24 hour megaswim, I have no amazing photos. But here is the start of a story I am writing for school, but is probably too long. Plus I don't even know how its going to end yet, which is a bit awkward because I go on about how important and astronomcially life changing it all is and I don't even know what is going to be the massive secret that could change the history of the world.

Here goes:

The dark covered the atmosphere like a blanket and the gravestones stood , old and crumbling. Old forgotten French people lay underneath the dirt, silently living underneath Paris. The scent of orange filled the air. While music drifted through the wind and restaurants , the Pe're Lachaise was quiet. Graveyards are not normally a particularly common meeting place, and yet a five year old stood barefoot on top of her great-great grandfather's grave.

 As she looked at the sky and the very thin, smile like moon, she thought of her descendants, all  deep below her, relying on her to carry out their purpose in life. Her face looked dirty and if anyone had seen her there that night they would've looked at her in disgust instead of as the most important person in all of Europe, perhaps even the world. Kneeling down on the grave, she flicked on her torch, letting light spill out all over the tombstone. She revealed, between the lines of Rest in Peace, other words.

More secret words.

She reached into her backpack and removed a very thin silver piece of equipment and started to etch, in very small letters, the most important words in the history of the world. With these words came life changing consequences.

As she started on the very last sentence a jab of pain shot through her stomach, leaving her bloody and unconscious. And then, very discreetly someone pulled her through the damp dirt and into the grave.  Everything went silent and the slight smell of orange disappeared. And the distant laughter of unsuspecting Parisians rang through the night, everyone unaware that tonight's events would cause an astronomical impact on human life.

That is the prolouge. I hope you like it. I will be back soon with more awesomeness:)

Love Carla

5 comments:

  1. That is sooooooo inspirational. How do you do that!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am soooooo jealous of your most awesome writing skills.

    You should write a novel and on this or something else and be a famous young writer!!!!!!!! You should also do a blog post and get ideas for a story off people and then create a story that people will never forget.

    Please do this for you. Use your skills to your advantage.I can imagine you as the cool young writer who wears really awesome clothes.

    I miss you.
    Lots of Love Ella xx

    P.s. Is this what you are going to put into the writing competition???? If so, I am screwed!!

    P.s.s. I need help with my story. I am such a bad writer!!!!!

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  2. AMAZING!!!! YOU CAN BE A WRITER!!! WHY ARE YOU SO DANM (excuse the language) COOLAWESOMEBOBLEUIGIWRGIGYURFOO?!?!??!?!?!!? WHYYYY CARLAAAA??? WHYYY??? Can you give us more when it is done??? Can I steal it and claim its mine and make a million dollars (nooo that would be meany)?!!!! You are like an amazing spark of a lark in the dark who's writing is as sharp as a shark (that did not make any sense... even in my head)!!!
    Charlotte
    :)

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  3. i so want to know what will happen next, in the story.

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  4. Wow Carla! This is great! Your writing is very expressive! PLEASE WRITE MOOOOORE!!!!!!!!

    In terms of new books, here are some suggestions:
    -How to Say Goodbye in Robot by Natalie Standiford (kind of a meloncholy story, but very enthralling)
    -The Fault in Our Stars b John Green (tear jerker, if you're into that, really moving and very touching)
    -The Gum Thief by Douglas Coupland (a hilarious book about a unsuspected relationship)
    -Persepolis 1 & 2 by Marjane Satrapi (graphic novels about a woman from Iran-exremely interesting)
    -Too Much Happiness by Alice Munro (short stories set in Canada, some funny, some sad)

    Musicwise, I enjoy Simon & Garfunkel, Aracde fire, Hunx & his Punx, and David Bowie. The Flaming Lips are also really good as well!

    Hope this helps! Love the story, and check me out when you have time!
    MAREN :)

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    1. sorry wrong post meant to put it on your last one...

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